Towers - 1 - 004"Ignorance is my life." Rifel admitted, his hot breath hitting Duncan in the face as he remained pinned to the soil. "It is all I need to know; and so I know everything."
This piece stunned me from the very first sentence to the end. It carries a very strong message that I believe you portrayed extremely well, and also shows the ruthlessness of the Triumvirate in a way that sets them up extremely clearly as the antagonists.
I also thought that even though it was very serious it also shows something we have all heard: ignorance is bliss. And leaves me wondering if this is true, and wanting to read more to see if you reveal the answer later on.
I also enjoy the use of traits that are so utterly human: friends, family, and making them sound weak looking at it from an animal perspective, in which there is only the pack, alpha and omega.
That`s exactly what I was going for.
I do believe ignorance is bliss.
In Duncan`s case -- he killed his family, and that filled him with such sorrow, hate and anger.
What if he had no idea who he killed, what if he was ordered to kill strangers as his rite of passage? Surely that would have had a different effect on him -- as he would be ignorant as to who he actually killed.
Also read my description of the piece, and read it again from the vantage point the human/animal allegory.